Daniel
Ellsworth’s day would have been better if not for the bird
faced demon in his bathtub, as welcome as a herpes sore on a virgin's face. He saw it
out of the corner of his eye after he turned the light on, right as
he was reaching for his razor and shaving cream. He had bought both
at the dollar store last week, where the other thing had happened in
the pet supply aisle.
The
demon was crouched down behind the shower curtain, the bulk of it a
spindly shadow. It had an incredibly gaunt human body, like a
prisoner from the Boer War. The body supported a head that was mostly
an oversized bird's beak filled with tiny, irregular teeth; along the
beak were a dozen beady eyes situated in rows.
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Well, it's definitely interesting. I think the highest praise I can give is that I wonder what is going on and what will happen next, and would like to find out. I would like to read more of this, to find out what direction it goes in, but I can't promise I would finish it (depending on the length). I would have to read more to answer that.
ReplyDeletehuh. . .what was that??
ReplyDeleteYou're a tease! I would def read the hell (that was a bad pun, sorry) out of this!
ReplyDeleteI'm with first anonymous. I liked it, but it felt like the middle of a book or something, so yes give me the rest
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback, all!
ReplyDeleteI do have an underlying mythology for this story, still working on that silly "plot" thing I hear kids are into now.
More to come!